Lawrence Geddie ESL Editing Sample

 

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Ramatoulaye and Aissatou were third world strong, independent , smart and educated progressive women , they did not fall into the" Norm" as most western women like to believe . They were pioneers of the promtion of African women. In the diary of So Long A letter Ramatoulaye and Aissatou display courage in a society that heavily believed in their customs/tradition. The writer Marima BA takes us on journey unfolding their lives, the heartbreak and disappointment of their fail marriages. The relationship with friends, families. Also Ramatoulaye speak on the co-wives. Ramatoulaye and Aissatou were strong, independent, smart, well-educated and progressive Third World women.  They did not fall into the "norm" as most Western women would like to believe.  They were pioneers in the promotion of African women. In the diary "So Long A Letter" Ramatoulaye and Aissatou display courage in a society that is heavily entrenched in custom and tradition.  The writer, Marima BA, takes us on a journey which unfolds the two women's lives, including the heartbreak and disappointment of their failed marriages and their relationships with friends and family members.  Ramatoulaye also writes about the traditional co-wives.

Ramatoulaye and Aissatou were third world strong, independent , smart and , well-educated and progressive Third World women , they .  They did not fall into the" Norm "norm" as most westernWestern women would like to believe ..  They were pioneers of in the promtionpromotion of African women. In the diary of "So Long A letterLetter" Ramatoulaye and Aissatou display courage in a society that is heavily believed in their customs/entrenched in custom and tradition.  The writer, Marima BA, takes us on a journey unfolding their which unfolds the two women's lives, including the heartbreak and disappointment of their failfailed marriages. The relationship and their relationships with friends, families. Also and family members.  Ramatoulaye speak on thealso writes about the traditional co-wives.


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